I was going to make my last post about the class and what I learned. I thought I would write something sappy and genuine enough to get some brownie points... But then I realized the last week of classes has murdered all sappiness I may have possessed. And plus why waste all my sappiness here when I have a nice reflection paper to do it in!
Thus instead here is a poem I have been working on for a while. It started out from a short muse write. Short enough that I will post the muse write and the poem that has come from it. Its about a whale swallowing the narrator (who we will call me right now) and floating around in its belly. I really like the poem and I am having fun writing it but I am totally lost on possible meanings.
Im currently trying to think of the whale as an idea or an experience. Perhaps the experience from introduction to poetry? Immersion into the material? Brownie points? I dont know.
Anyway, read for yourself and maybe someone can point me in the right direction?
The Muse Write:
A whale swallows
Me whole into its
Blue sea soaked soggy belly
Where I swim in a
Glowing digestive abyss.
A soft melodic symphony
Choreographs my free swim
Within its bowels
Fish inhaled flutter about me
Like underwater butterflies
On a cool fall day
The "Poem": Whale Breathing
A whale swallows
Me whole into its
Blue sea-soaked soggy belly
Where I swim in a
Glowing digestive abyss
And colorful fish inhaled flutter about me
Like underwater butterflies or fireworks
And a soft melodic symphony of violins
Choreographs my slow-motion free swim
Within its watery bowels
Flipping fully clothed in its stomach
Fighting against the fluids
And I don’t know if this dream
Will end or if I have gills
Because when I dive deeper into its
Fleshy ribbed intestines
I am still breathing
This was a really cool concept! I think the metaphor may be stronger if you don't mention its a whale in the poem. It seems to me like you have a pretty good idea of what its about, neat idea and I really liked the ending!
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